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OK, so I'm just writing some lyrics and I'd like your opinion if this is a good start to a verse.

This is for the third verse as I'm doing a collaboration on a fellow rappers song

Verse 3

I lost my innocence, but I'm lethal with the diligence
spitting over instruments, failed with the syllabus
content indigenous, sick of being thrown insolence
Im in my infancy but the wisdom i show is instantly
disregarded as the ignorance in me
I fail to see....

And there's where it stops, do you think I should carry on with this direction? 
 

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hobbes said:
It sounds pretty cool
I don't see why it's so hard to keep going?
How long did it take you to write those bars?
Took me about 15 mins to write those.

It's hard to keep going sometimes because I use a lot of syllables.

I've finished the collab now though, I'll post the song when it's mixed. 
 

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Beats And Lyrics said:
OK, so I'm just writing some lyrics and I'd like your opinion if this is a good start to a verse.

This is for the third verse as I'm doing a collaboration on a fellow rappers song

Verse 3

I lost my innocence, but I'm lethal with the diligence
spitting over instruments, failed with the syllabus
content indigenous, sick of being thrown insolence
Im in my infancy but the wisdom i show is instantly
disregarded as the ignorance in me
I fail to see....

And there's where it stops, do you think I should carry on with this direction? 
I fail to see how being a parody would carry me
But I guess its the only way for me apparently
Wary be my enemies who pretend to see the truth
Me? I'm tryin find the meaning of life inside a booth
 
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